While the World Dissolves Around Us
He parks across from my blue front door and I turn to him. ‘Want to come in for some coffee?’ He’s so lovely, all the confidence I’ve been faking drains away. ‘Y’know, or…’
But he’s shy too and his, ‘Or?’ comes out croaky. A caged bird flutters in my ribcage as he takes my hand.
Or…we strip naked and dance in the rain; we paint each other’s names in ten-metre-high letters; we sit here forever, as the street lights shatter to diamonds and the world dissolves around us.
But all I say is, ‘Or, I do have some hot chocolate.’
M J Lewis ©2015
In times of strife, take a deep breath and count to one hundred – one hundred words that is. Bit of a crazy week so far and half expected something angry to appear on the page. So what did we get – a call from the muse of love!
Many thanks firstly to Bjorn whose story supplied me with one vital two-letter word, full of possibilities. (Hope he’ll see it an inspiration rather than plagiarism.) A thank you to all who drop by and most especially to our newly liberated host, Rochelle, who also supplied the photo this week.
Click here for more rain soaked stories, where you might also notice I have come out, indeed emerged from behind my foxglove, with the same haircut only half a century on.
Ah.. yes it’s all in that little word left hanging.. and alas I do not think hot chocolate is a key-word for anything equally hot.
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I’ll leave all that to the reader…I just love hot chocolate!
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Dear MJ,
It’s probably best to start out with hot chocolate. Stripping naked and dancing in the rain can come later. 😉 Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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There will be other rainy nights for the naked dancing! 🙂
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i’d go for the hot chocolate. it’s always better to start slow.
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The shyness was painful in this piece and I loved it.
Well done.
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Thanks Tracey. Coincidentally,
I wrote this and then caught up with the Joe Wright film adaptation of Pride and Prejudice. Mr Bingley’s/the actor’s delightful shyness over his proposal to Jane had me laughing and crying – I think many of us have been there.
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Hot chocolate for me I think. All that dancing in the rain… not good for you. Nicely done.
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That’s ‘coz you’re sick! 😉 I’m wondering if my own running in the rain yesterday got me good!
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as the street lights shatter to diamonds and the world dissolves around us…. so romantic and very poetic! Stripping naked and dancing in the rain would be a better story to tell the grandkids 🙂
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To dance or not dance – the non-dancers are winning at the moment but justjoyfulness you’re putting up a good case for posterity!
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🙂 We should raise the bar for our descendants 🙂
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We’ve all been through the first date “coffee” moment. You captured the emotion so well.
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I’d like to think even with the internet doing most things for us (including courtship) that loaded coffee moment is still alive and well and pretty universally understood.
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coffee, chocolate, or coupling….
in whatever order.
Nice.
Randy
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As an adult I think you’re entitled to continue this story in your own imagination as you see fit, but don’t forget the nude dancing!
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Hot chocolate will do for me, MJ
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Before, after or instead of naked dancing? 🙂
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Or during?
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I found this quite delightful
My only disappointment was the number of spoilsports in the comments above!
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I’ll put that down as another vote for the naked dancing!
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Lovely subtext. Your story leaves me wanting some hot chocolate. Nicely done!
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Good to get away from the dancing and back to romance and literary merit for a second! Thank you.
But I am running out of cups for that hot chocolate at the last count…
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I love this. That nervousness, the butterflies… I say the hot beverages can come AFTER… 😉
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So dancing and hot chocolate – I’ve lost count now!
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Hee hee!!
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My arthritic hip insists I remain on the balcony with a hot chocolate….and a video recorder with a zoom lens. 😉
A true-to-life story. Well told.
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Thanks for your comments – but I think you should be over at Mick Lively’s post with that video recorder. (The one that isn’t to do with pets.) 🙂
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You’ll never know what you missed! Delightful.
Rosey Pinkerton’s blog
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Thanks Rosey!
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I love this. The dancing in the rain sounds just rught, but with the shy, she might scare him away. So, first chocolate, then cuddling etc., then dancing naked. 😉
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A new category – there must be cuddling! Thanks for your appreciation.
Just been reminded by Amazon to review my recent purchase of a DVD of Jane Austen’s Persuasion – as if I need to add to the hundreds already there. Realising people do connect with romance – which I guess is not such a surprise and really rather nice!
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LOL! loved reading the story. I love romantic stories and this made my quota for the day. I vote for chocolate and cuddles, let’s take the loving slowly.
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This is great! You can always start with hot chocolate. I’m with Rochelle. All is not lost.
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Chocolate, cuddles, nude dancing, the ten-metre-high letters, fast, slow… Don’t think it really matters as long as it’s loving and consensual.
But what happens if one wants to dance and the other wants something else… Ask Tina!
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It’s a start, and who knows where it may lead? Hot chocolate is a nice, cosy drink.
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Indeed who knows where…Things have to start somewhere and hot chocolate is as good a place as any.
PS The first episode of River is a love story too – all types of love…
Thanks for visiting.
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I love your title While the World Dissolves Around Us! I remember being in that state once upon a time. Now I want to write a hot torid one hundred words! LOL
Lily
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Go for it! Glad to inspire.
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This has to be a first date. Hot chocolate is good. Well done, MJ. 🙂 — Suzanne
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I’m leaving all such choices up to my characters and the reader’s imagination – nothing to do with me. I’m only the author! 🙂
Thanks for visiting.
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