Tidying Up After
You left early, mid-sentence; grass uncut, the bird table you were attempting to mend face down on the patio. Mind you, you tidied away that last bottle to the very last drop.
Back home, I have taken to washing up teaspoons, burning old postcards, composting diaries. Don’t be alarmed; I am but a finger’s stretch closer to the shadows. I won’t say anything significant, at least until I’ve cleared this cupboard.
My partner on the other hand is accumulating wood and screws, enough to open a hardware shop. Or build an arc. Or in the event, our coffins. Now that’s tidy.
Miranda Lewis, 2018
(Genre: unreliable memoir)
Welcome readers and writers to Friday Fiction, hosted by the indefatigable, inestimable Rochelle, with thanks to Ronda Del Boccio for the photo prompt. Now you might be thinking it isn’t Friday and this isn’t really fiction, but on the other hand it is 100 words.
Thanks to all who visit and most especially those who stay to comment. To graze on a whole pasture of stories click here.
Best story I’ve read this week. Beautifully crafted, brilliantly done!
Susan A Eames at
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Thank you, Susan. Much appreciated!
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There are so many threads to this. It’s brilliant!
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Thank you Neil for your kind comment!
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Excellent story, with very subtle emotions.
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Thanks Penny!
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Now that’s what you call a multi-layered story. I had to read it a few times to fully savour it.
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And thanks for doing so Sandra!
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Loved the width and depth of this – in so few words.
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Thank you Yarnspinnerr!
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I have to agree with everyone else. Many layers here, and I had to read it more than once. Outstanding.
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Everyone has been very kind and you are no exception. Thank you for reading and commenting.
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Dear Miranda,
Lovely, multilayered story. Well done and welcome back.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks Rochelle. And yes it has been a long time!
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This read like a poem, bits of images, all pointing to one inevitable consequence. Love the alcohol, being completely polished off, while all else is abandoned, even the simple act of finishing a sentence. Masterfully crafted.
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Lovely comment. Thank you!
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An interesting story that challenged me to think hard, well done.
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Beautifully written, thought-provoking story. The reference to “tidying” the bottle is very clever.
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Beautiful and sad story, you set the mood perfectly.
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Beautifully crafted.
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